The Songwriting Thread

[kdowns]

O Hai There... I don't think this thread would fit in over in the art corner with all the artists... So I will post my songs that I have wrote here. I will try to post a Song every Week!

Please feel free to share what you have written; be it verses, or a complete songs. Exchange feedback with other members; discussing your writing process and if there's any tips you have to give.

Spoiler: A Darkness inside

This path that we walk is getting shorter and Shorter
Yet I walk with a clear head and yet
You walk the opposite path.
I tried to reach for your hand but you were far beyond my reach

It's time for me to walk away
Down the path of the lost and confused
With no end in sight but only futile attempts
Waiting for someone to come around
and to just call my name

This hesitation of mine is what doomed us
These flaws will continue to haunt me
They are continueing to consume us.
and yet you were able to break free.

It's time for me to walk away
Down the path of the lost and confused
With no end in sight but only futile attempts
Waiting for someone to come around
and to just call my name

This darkness is surrounding me.
I want to break away but I am to weak
Every word spent is tearing away at me
my mind and soul is falling apart

It's time for me to walk away
Down the path of the lost and confused
With no end in sight but only futile attempts
Waiting for someone to come around
and to just call my name

Then in came a shimmering ray of hope
A hand reaches out to me
Maybe this hope will finally get me moving
The darkness is breaking and I am finally free

It's time for me to walk away
Down the path of the lost and confused
With no end in sight but only futile attempts
Waiting for someone to come around
and to just call my name
I am finally Free...

Spoiler: A Cheesy Love Song

Here we lie tonight under the stars
We will fill the air with our words
Our Whispers will be our solace
We long for this everlasting night

Tonight is our night, our solemnity
Nothing will be left unfinished
The wind will carry my words
But will your ears hear my heart screaming.

As we walk down this dim litted street
Your smile will guide me as a beacon of hope
Yet will we walk this path together
Or will we be seperated by a fork in the road.

Tonight is our night, our solemnity
Nothing will be left unfinished
The wind will carry my words
But will your ears hear my heart screaming.

Will you notice my heart beating faster and faster
With each and every single step we take
down this dim litted path
where I am left breathless by this heroine

Tonight is our night, our solemnity
Nothing will be left unfinished
The wind will carry my words
But will your ears hear my heart screaming.

 

[faintsmile1992]

Re: Kdowns' Songwriting Thread.

Maybe this would interest you?

http://mangahelpers.com/forum/showthread.php/73429-Improving-song-lyrics?highlight=

 

[kdowns]

Re: Kdowns' Songwriting Thread.

No no no no... These are my own lyrics and I find them perfect the way they are.

 

[faintsmile1992]

Re: Kdowns' Songwriting Thread.

I know lol, I just thought you might be interested in my own songwriting experiment.

 

[kdowns]

Re: Kdowns' Songwriting Thread.

It's just that I have low self-esteem as it is already, I just wouldn't want to see my songs get torn a part or see it getting advice on...

 

[alphabeta]

Re: Kdowns' Songwriting Thread.

Holy WOW, I didn't knew this thread existed. Dude, you need to promote this thing harder.

Anyway, I think it's reall cool that you write lyrics. Do you also write the corresponding music? I'm just asking, because a very close friend of mine () would like to try his music-arranging abilities. I That good friend also knows somebody who would love to play the actual song.

 

[goldb]

Re: Kdowns' Songwriting Thread.

Nice thread Kevin, keep up the good work and hope to see more of you material.

 

[kdowns]

Re: Kdowns' Songwriting Thread.

Spoiler: The End of Me

Here I Lie by the bedside
This life is becoming way to much
Losing myself at the very thought
And Here you came trotting into that very thought
In which I had excluded you from.


The Heartbreak, The Heartache
It's all to much for me
Never Taking Chances, All the wrong Cards
It was all a game

Everyone Plays this Game
Yet I am the one who's at fault
All it took was a chance
Yet I let my ignorance get in the fucking way

The Heartbreak, The Heartache
It's all to much for me
Never Taking Chances, All the wrong Cards
It was all a game

This hole that is left in my heart will never heal
Yet I can't help but to laugh at this self inflicted pain
Day after Day it was the same shit hole of a life
Wanting to crawl my way out
Just trying to find an end to this pathetic Story.

The Heartbreak, The Heartache
It's all to much for me
Never Taking Chances, All the wrong Cards
It was all a game


The Heartbreak, The Heartache
It's all to much for me
Never Taking Chances, All the wrong Cards
It was all a game
Untill I met you.

---------- Post added February 10, 2012 at 12:27 AM ---------- Previous post was February 05, 2012 at 10:31 PM ----------

Copyright to the owners of their respective characters or names of groups used in this song.

My Submission to the Creative Writing Contest

Spoiler: Reference Dump

My heart may be frail.
My heart may be weak.
With this Will of Fire
I will never Break under the pressure.

When the day ends we will bask in the glory of sweet victory
While those who stand in our ways will suffer an agonizing defeat.
You can bet your innocence that they will never give up for their goals.
No matter if the Noah, Homunculous, Marines, or even the Akatsuki get in their ways.
They will Always prevail in the face of Justice.

Staring at the face of the moon is causing so much madness in the world.
Slowly being driven to insanity, with no cure.
Relying on our meisters to set our crazed mind to rest.
While everyone is fighting their own battles with their inner demons.

When the day ends we will bask in the glory of sweet victory
While those who stand in our ways will suffer an agonizing defeat.
You can bet your innocence that they will never give up for their goals.
No matter if the Noah, Homunculous, Marines, or even the Akatsuki get in their ways.
They will Always prevail in the face of Justice.

These Charms and Configurations that we've been taught.
They are so futile against all of these Dark Arts.
That are being casted all around us.
Where is our Dumbledore to save us from this nightmare?

When the day ends we will bask in the glory of sweet victory
While those who stand in our ways will suffer an agonizing defeat.
You can bet your innocence that they will never give up for their goals.
No matter if the Noah, Homunculous, Marines, or even the Akatsuki get in their ways.
They will Always prevail in the face of Justice.

 

[Naomi]

Re: Kdowns' Songwriting Thread.

These Charms and Configurations that we've been taught.
They are so futile against all of these Dark Arts.

My favorite line.

 

[kdowns]

Re: Kdowns' Songwriting Thread.

These Charms and Configurations that we've been taught.
They are so futile against all of these Dark Arts.

My favorite line.

How did I know that a part from that section would be your favorite :3

---------- Post added February 28, 2012 at 11:54 AM ---------- Previous post was February 10, 2012 at 05:12 PM ----------

I've been slacking... 2 songs will be up tonight.

---------- Post added March 02, 2012 at 09:06 AM ---------- Previous post was February 28, 2012 at 11:54 AM ----------

Spoiler: Meh

I'm Fighting for a chance
to give you a glimpse
of how hard it is
being a man with a dream
who crashes and burns
with every chance he takes

Take 1...2...3
Everything is the same
with each step we take
we're setting ourselves up
for denial....for self-destruction

The Blaze that burns in everyone
is the same flame that has been passed down
Generation after Generation after Generation
Mankind has always been evolving

Take 1...2...3
Everything is the same
with each step we take
we're setting ourselves up
for denial....for self-destruction

We're destined this way
with no hope of changing this path
Yet, I find myself attempting to change this
to turn to another page in life
to make a name for myself

Take 1...2...3
Everything is the same
with each step we take
we're setting ourselves up
for denial....for self-destruction

Spoiler: The Facade

Was this a lie, was this all a fabricated truth
These memories we made are all gone in a flash
you expect this to all be gone in a flash
but I've got a different idea in mind.

All I ever did was care, but you couldn't see this
No matter how hard I tried, you just pushed me away
All I ever wanted was to let you in
But this Facade you put on kept me away

So here I am in front of you
Yet, I don't think you can see
This ghost of your past
who is trying to be in your future
but what can I do when I can't be by you in the present

All I ever did was care, but you couldn't see this
No matter how hard I tried, you just pushed me away
All I ever wanted was to let you in
But this Facade you put on kept me away

The clock is ticking with each second wasted
I am yearning just for a simple response
Just to calm this trouble mind of mine
You let me build this hope and I'm not ready to let go

All I ever did was care, but you couldn't see this
No matter how hard I tried, you just pushed me away
All I ever wanted was to let you in
But this Facade you put on kept me away

This Facade will not be the end.

 

[Naomi]

Re: Kdowns' Songwriting Thread.

Meh was superb, Downs. I can hear something with those lyrics playing on my iPod. The Facade was good as well.

The first and fifth stanzas of the first one really stood out though. Thanks for posting~

 

[blai]

Re: Kdowns' Songwriting Thread.

Can't we make this a general songwriting thread? I have some pieces I would like some input to as well but I don't wanna make a completely new thread for them nor intrude in your =/

Would be nice to have a place to hang-out and discuss / give tips etc :3

Could maybe be a general writing thread for both poets and lyricists?

 

[goldb]

Re: Kdowns' Songwriting Thread.

I did suggest this, dunno why I forgot to change it!

Doing it now!

 

[xi0]

Re: Kdowns' Songwriting Thread.

He could always post it in his thread as well as here

 

[kdowns]

I had meant to change it also but never got to it xD

 

[kdowns]

BAM UPDATE AFTER 3 MONTHS

Spoiler: The Curse of the Witch

I am out of time
And it looks like I fucked up again
unfulfilled promises that were meant to last
but ended with the shattering of happiness

(Chorus) You've had way to much practice with this
And yet with this in my mind
I still let you into my heart
Hoping for a chance in making a change

Why can't I just get this through my head
You were much too good for me
For such a simpleton like me
Who had fallen under the witch's spell
With no sign of breaking this curse

(Chorus) You've had way to much practice with this
And yet with this in my mind
I still let you into my heart
Hoping for a chance in making a change

Your name had became a taboo to me
But trying to scratch your name out of my memories
Proved to be way too much for me to handle
This impact you've made still continues to exist
With no sign of eradication

(Chorus) You've had way to much practice with this
And yet with this in my mind
I still let you into my heart
Hoping for a chance in making a change

Then I realized that... (Deep down on the inside x2)

(Chorus) You've had way to much practice with this
And yet with this in my mind
I still let you into my heart
Hoping for a chance in making a change

Then I realized that deep down on the inside.
I'd do it again just to see you smile.

 

[Naomi]

You're getting better, KD. I think this one is fantastic. It feels like I'm really starting to understand your thoughts more these days.

 

[kdowns]

I don't know if that is a good or bad thing! O.o

And Thank you

---------- Post added June 30, 2012 at 06:30 PM ---------- Previous post was June 28, 2012 at 12:13 AM ----------

Spoiler: Game Over

Good Guys finish last
Bad Guys finish first
But you can never finish
Something that you've never started.

(Chrous)
Left alone by myself in isolation
My thoughts constantly eating me alive
I've got no where left to hid
No where to run.
It's time to face things head on

You'd never believe it when I said I never tried
When I tried everything on you
With a cold brush of reality
You destroyed everything in a single instant.

(Chrous)
Left alone by myself in isolation
My thoughts constantly eating me alive
I've got no where left to hid
No where to run.
It's time to face things head on

It's time to give it all up
You'd never get a second chance
To royally fuck my life over
It's time to say Good-Bye
Is the hardest thing anyone can hear

(Chrous)
Left alone by myself in isolation
My thoughts constantly eating me alive
I've got no where left to hid
No where to run.
It's time to face things head on

No where to run.
It's time to face things head on

 

[NiggaPlz]

i didnt think that people would make a thread like this is it ok to share some of my songs to you

 

[kdowns]

Spoiler: On my own

I have so many things to tell you
but I cannot find the words to say it.
Can you feel it?
This heart that beats for you and only you.

-Chrous-
I am giving up on caring for people.
Who can never return the favor.
Laying it all on the table
and having it shoved in my face (Shoved in my face)


You've got me right where you want me.
In the palms of your hands, Just waiting for your approval.
Your Love is all that I ever wanted.
Just to escape from this Endless Abyss
That my Heart has Captivated me in.

-Chrous-
I am giving up on caring for people.
Who can never return the favor.
Laying it all on the table
and having it shoved in my face (Shoved in my face)

I am walking out of this door
Escaping this abyss On my own
Not waiting for any help from anyone
It's time I did something for myself
And escape the restraints of myself.

-Chrous-
I am giving up on caring for people.
Who can never return the favor.
Laying it all on the table
and having it shoved in my face (Shoved in my face)

This is who I really am.
Can you judge me for something you've molded me into
Breaking the mold
Is all that I have left to do for myself
Then I can be myself again

-Chrous-
I am giving up on caring for people.
Who can never return the favor.
Laying it all on the table
and having it shoved in my face (Shoved in my face)