delete attempts Editing Practice #001!

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I know it's not rotated right; I messed up. Please tell me what you think.

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edit:
Fixed a typo, and changed some stuff...

 

[shinwei]

Hey not bad. I'd like to hear what kind of experience you had in the past.

One thing though: "You didn't brush your teeth yet!"
That bubble. You should never ever ever ever have italics up for an entire bubble, it lowers the readability slightly, so it completely defeats the purpose of making the text stand out as a shout.

 

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I don't have any experience. It's my first try for this and the cleaning challenge #01. I just try to follow the tutorials here, actually, and I also read Edited Mangas and try to learn from them. ^^

One thing though: "You didn't brush your teeth yet!"
That bubble. You should never ever ever ever have italics up for an entire bubble, it lowers the readability slightly, so it completely defeats the purpose of making the text stand out as a shout.

I see. So how should it be done? Should the text be bold or just regular?

And thanks for the input. ^^

 

[shinwei]

Just make sure its Strong AA. Sometimes you can increase the font height a little bit too.